The following is from the University of Maryland Global Campus.
Thesis Statement and Controlling Idea
So what? This is the question you will get asked if your thesis statement, or main idea, is not obvious in your paper. Your thesis statement is the most important part of your writing; without it, your paper doesn’t have a main point or stance. A thesis statement states the purpose and topic of your writing, and the controlling idea indicates the direction and, often, the writing strategy you will adopt.
Your thesis is like a road map, guiding your readers so that they know what to expect.
Generally, your thesis is placed at the end of your introduction and is a concise and simple sentence that combines your topic and your position on the topic. Like a road map, your thesis lets your readers know what to expect from the rest of your paper. Your body paragraphs support it, and your essay lacks direction without it.
It is important to keep in mind that this early in your writing, your thesis statement is really a working thesis that you use to begin thinking about your topic. You may revise this thesis many times before you are finished thinking and ready to write your final draft. Below are some sample thesis statements.
YOUR TOPIC + POSITION ON TOPIC = THESIS STATEMENT
| YOUR TOPIC | POSITION | THESIS STATEMENT |
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Internet use
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Actions need to be taken to help maintain a balance because many people are addicted.
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While some argue that daily technology use has little effect on wellbeing, research shows that physical, mental, and social repercussions are undeniable and drastic actions need to be taken to help young people find balance.
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Fast food
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Fast food causes health issues.
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Consuming fast food regularly leads to heart disease, diabetes, and obesity and there are lifestyle solutions to prevent these health issues.
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Global warming
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There are many things we can do to slow global warming.
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Global warming is a real threat to the world; as human beings, we can slow climate change by carpooling, using less energy at home, and eating a mostly plant-based diet.
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Thesis Statement Dos
Do:
- Present an argument, stance, or claim. Can your audience argue with it?
- Provide a key to the organization of your paper. Can you construct body paragraphs that support it?
- Mirror the assignment prompt. Are you following what is expected of you?
- Present the thesis at the end of the introduction.
- Answer the question: “so what?”
- Present an argument that can be supported by reputable research. Is your argument logical?
- Embrace the “how” and “why” elements. It’s a great strategy to present the problem, examine why it’s a problem, and show how it can be fixed.
Thesis Statement Don’ts
Don’t:
- Include announcement style language like “this paper will discuss” or “this will be shown in this essay.”
- Be informative only with no argument or stance, such as, “Some high school seniors decide to take a gap year.”
- Include overly broad or generalized statements like, “Kids of this generation are lazy.”
- Force the reader to guess what the paper will prove or discuss
- Be questions.
https://www.umgc.edu/current-students/learning-resources/writing-center/online-guide-to-writing/tutorial/chapter2/ch2-10
The following info comes from Shoreline Community College.
“Your final research paper must have a thesis. It is not simply reporting facts. Rather, it is making a case, proving a point, using the facts you research to back up your case. The thesis is the point your paper is trying to prove. Here are some essential points to keep in mind about the thesis, starting with a definition.
Thesis (plural: theses, pronounced THEES-eez): The point that an essay is trying to prove. Also known as the claim or argument. Everything in a persuasive essay relates to the thesis, either as evidence, explanation, elaboration or rebuttal of alternative claims. Think of the thesis as the spine of your paper. Just as all the parts of your body are connected to the spine, and without the spine your body could not stand, so too in your essay all parts must be connected to the thesis, and without the thesis the essay cannot stand. Parts that are not connected must be revised so that they do connect, or else eliminated. A thesis, in other words, is not the same as the thesis statement, which is a sentence or two in your introduction that tells the reader what the thesis is. The thesis is not limited to one spot in your essay; it runs through the whole thing, from start to finish.
A thesis can be expressed as a statement
Because the thesis is what you’re trying to prove, it must be possible to express it in the form of a statement or assertion (e.g., “the sky is blue”). It is not a question (“what color is the sky?”) or a topic (“the color of the sky”). Notice that “The sky is blue” is a complete declarative sentence, while the topic (“the color of the sky”) is not—it does not say anything about the sky’s color.
A thesis is arguable
An arguable thesis is one you have to give reasons for, that is worth proving (i.e., not obvious). So my example above is not a valid thesis, because everybody knows what color the sky is. An arguable thesis might be, for example, “The sky only became blue about 1 billion years ago, when the composition of the atmosphere changed to produce the specific refraction of sunlight that makes it look blue.” (I have no idea if this is true or not, by the way—it’s just an example.) This statement is not obvious, and it would require evidence about the nature of the atmosphere a billion years ago, and explanations of why that evidence is reliable, in order to be proved.
Theses can be statements about matters of fact (e.g., the physical structure of the atom), interpretation (e.g., the true meaning of Hamlet), analysis (e.g., the causes of diabetes), or values (e.g., the morality of the death penalty). In this class theses about values are not allowed. (See below re: prescriptive and descriptive theses). Your paper should make a persuasive case about some question of fact, interpretation or analysis.
Your thesis will answer your research question
Eventually, you will have refined your research question, putting it into a well-focused form that allows you to identify many sources, all dealing with that question in some way—trying to answer it, providing information needed to answer it, trying to answer related questions that shed light on it somehow. Your paper will then attempt to answer this question, and the answer you provide will be your thesis.
Descriptive and prescriptive theses
A descriptive thesis makes a claim about how things are. A prescriptive thesis makes a claim about how things should be. (Think of a doctor’s prescription, which tells you what you should do to get well, as opposed to a diagnosis, which simply describes your illness.) You can agree with someone about how things are even if you don’t share their values. But you can’t agree on how things should be unless you share at least one value. Therefore, prescriptive theses deal with questions of values, ethics or morality. And as I said, such theses are not allowed in this class.
Here are some features of each type of thesis.
A descriptive thesis
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- makes an “is” statement
- appeals to evidence that anyone (given enough training) can observe and confirm
- appeals to logic that anyone (again, given enough training) can test and confirm
- deals in measurement, analysis, interpretation, explanation
A prescriptive thesis also uses evidence, logic, measurement, analysis, interpretation and explanation. However, unlike a descriptive thesis, it also
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- makes a “should” statement
- appeals to shared values or morals—assessments of what is “good” and “bad.”
Some examples of descriptive theses:
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- Racism in this country has historical roots in the theft of indigenous land and the enslavement of African peoples to work that land (Lowen, 143).
- Global warming is real and is caused by human activity, not natural changes in the climate.
- American popular music is rooted in the folk tradition of African Americans.
- The United States does not offer equal economic opportunity to all of its citizens.
Some examples of prescriptive theses:
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- We all need to work hard to overcome the legacy of slavery and racism.
- Global warming must be stopped!
- Music teachers should teach their students about the African American roots of American popular music.
- The United States economic system should be reformed so that everyone has equal economic opportunity.
In some cases a descriptive thesis may strongly imply a prescriptive argument as well (as in most of the examples above). However, note that one can agree or disagree with the descriptive thesis regardless of how one feels about the moral question. For example, some people agree that global warming is real and caused by human activity, but they do not believe it is a bad thing.
Remember: prescriptive theses (theses about values, ethics, morality, or “shoulds”) are not allowed in this class.“
